Withered Rose

...Ashes, ashes, they all fall DOWN...
2005-04-09 23:59:59 (UTC)

Get help (You..)

"Get help"

You abandoned your children
Once and for all
He was ten years old
She was only four
You left them in your car
Parked right outside your sister's door
You hadn't spoken to your sister in years
She had no children of her own
And was not hoping to; definitely not any time soon
You flew to France
Where you met a man
Had an affair
Just what exactly was your plan?
You're a lousy mother
You admit it yourself
So you gave your children to your sister
When will you think of someone other than yourself?
You abandoned your children
You soon abandoned yourself
Now you need to get some help


~Sometimes I'm not sure if I used a word right. I hope I
did......feedback...makes me happy...... ;)

~It feels like there's something missing from the poem to
me. What do you think? Does it need more? Or changes?